Chapter Forty-Three

Every hero has to have a moment of despair and realizing that Dani’s personality has been overwritten and Bernie has been recaptured is Michael’s.  I rewrote the scene several times until I was satisfied with his reaction.  I didn’t want him completely broken but at the same time, it needed to be a strong wake up call about the difference between fantasy and reality.

When Dani believes that Michael is dead, that is her dark moment and unlike Michael, she dives right into it.  I wanted to contrast their reactions.  Michael goes down trying to protect while Dani plans for suicidal vengeance. 

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